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Story Idea? Does it Sound Like Something You Would Read?

4 March 2010 1 views 3 Comments

ok, you know how everything is vampires now-a-days? well i was thinking about writing a book about zombies… except they look like normal human beings… they just have different eating habits and stuff,… does it sound like a book you would read? here’s part of it that i just wrote:

I quickly pulled the no-finger gloves over my hands to hide the scars. If anyone knew about them, my dad would kill me. total murder. I grabbed my Vampires Suck t-shirt and pulled it over my scrawny neck and over my pale chest. I looked down at my boxers and realized that I couldn’t go to school with only a shirt and gloves on, so I got some red skinny jeans on and bolted down the stairs. When I walked past the mirror to the living room I flashed a smile at the tall, pale, skinny blond kid who was staring back at me.
I walked into the living room and grabbed the bottle of sunblock and soaked my arms. I hated how I had to put on all the sunblock and use all the protection… just because somebody might find out what I was wasn’t that big of a deal! hey, maybe I could meet Ellen DeGeneres if I did tell everyone I was a zom–
“Michael!” At the sound of his voice my eyes went wide. “Michael!” He yelled my name again.
Oh boy…. was I in big trouble or what…

so ya.. does it sound like something you would read?
EDIT: haha, skin condition… :D um… well Michael has to put on the sunscreen so his skin wont turn a gray-ish color in the sunlight

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3 Comments »

  • kashtastic said:

    Sounds like an interesting story.

    I want to go on Ellen too xP

    What makes the zombie different than people who have a skin condition?

  • Jane said:

    It sounds like he’s a vampire. Don’t take offense. If you’ve ever read the book Generation Dead it kind of shows how zombie books are getting popular. I think you should somehow explain what he’s wearing without putting it like that. I’m not sure if this is just a draft or not. But I think it shows better when in the writing when you don’t full out explain, but easily get into it as you go. Sorry if this is a little hard to follow. One last thing, make things your own! Like make up new ideas. This is your story. Research things, watch old zombie movies and make it fun. Good luck.

  • Mystic said:

    The idea is good but I think the zombies should have a bit of… fantasy flair. I mean, otherwise ther’re not really zombies at all..

    The writing was fairly good but I think you need to make it longer by showing what is happening in detail, and not telling.
    :)

    p.s thanks for answering mine

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